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Critique wanted!
Hey guys, I'm entering a short story contest through the school. I've been trying to get as many people as possible to read it and critique it first, just to make sure it's the best it can be. Do you guys mind reading it and giving me some opinions? It's verrrry hard for me to do this, I hate people reading my writing, but I figure it's the only way to make it better. ^^;
Specifically, I find the very end weak, but I was reaching the 500 word limit, so I sort of panicked.
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Erased, Sending in the story. Thanks! :)
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<+Cameron> If one of us was Konata, and the other was Kagami, we'd be getting married right now
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Last edited by Lunies; 10-28-2010 at 06:12 PM.
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