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Re: Battle for 9.18 The Fan - Chapter 2: Hired Hands
I agree with Kana, in a way. I've read some of the profiles, yet at the same time, a sentence or two to describe would be good for future characters, or if old characters were described later in a way to explain actions they take.
But on a positive side, everyone seems happy with the way you've rightfully portrayed their characters! Your writing style is action-packed, too, and nothing seems awkward or rushed to me. Just lots of interesting characters so far. Keep up the amazing work, the continuity of the story looks like it's headed somewhere positive. :)
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